Response to Rough Cut

This is the rough cut of our video we showed this to Mrs McLuckie and she gave us feed back on how we could improve it.
There is a section of the video which we have not yet filled and so we cut some of the music out and this is why there is a jump in the soundtrack.

Rough Cut from georgina campbell on Vimeo.

The overall response to our rough cut from Mrs McLuckie was that it had potential but the loose ends needed to be tided up to gain the best marks. The first thing she commented on was the first verse, she thought it was quite slow and boring as it was just Georgina walking forward. She also said the editing was too slow on this section which also made the beginning boring when it is supposed to capture the audience’s attention because it is the fist thing they see. As the tempo of the music and the editing became faster she said the video started to capture her attention although the bathroom scene shots had to be redone as some of them were out of focus. At the end of the video there is a shot where the clown mask rises up from the floor but Mrs McLuckie did not like this as she thought it would take the impact away from the final shot where the mask is dropped. The last comment she made was on the scene at the end of the video were Georgina was struggling with the mask and the clips were fast forwarded to give more of an impact. She liked this but thought the scene went on for to long and so should be broken up slightly.

We showed the roughcut to a few class mates to gain feedback from the target audience and people with a technical mind. The main feedback from the group was that the video had a good storyline and their were some good ideas in the video but they could be executed a little better by changing some of the editing and shots. A few people thought that the photographs and clown faces at the beginning was a bit boring and irrelevant. Another criticism was of the bathroom scene some people felt that this did not make sense but could be good if a few of the shots were changed to include a few more wide shots and point of view shots.

We will use the constructive criticism to develop our music video further.